You've stumbled into the bleedin' obvious. Have you heard of John Cleese of Monty Python and Fawlty Towers? He had a saying: "That's a statement of the bleedin' obvious." Be careful of stating the obvious, a truism that everyone knows and no one wants to read. In even professionally written publications you still see journalists writing statements of the bleedin' obvious:
- None of us is getting any younger.
- We all have to die sometime.
- There was no television at the dawn of time.
- A thousand years ago people lived in the olden days.
- Today we live in modern times.
- What does or doesn't happen in the future remains to be seen.
Yawn, y-a- - w---n . . . In an opening sentence and at most other times, you must let the reader know something she/he probably doesn't know. You might like to go through your material and be confident that you haven't made further statements of the bleedin' obvious.